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Script for Issue 1 of The Legacy comic book

Disclaimer: This is unedited and may contain language that is not suitable for a young audience. Reader discretion advised.

          Page 1 Page 1

            Panel 1 Alister from a rooftop looks towards the church on
            the hill. Darkness consumes the sky but there is a small
            light piercing the sky above the church. Behind Alister
            sits his hovercycle. His sword is in its sheath on his
            back.

                              ALISTER
                    I can’t believe it’s been 10 years
                    since all this began, and I still
                    try to do good, but all I want to
                    do is rest. Rest it seems to be all
                    I think of when I should be
                    thinking of this city; think of my
                    city. I’m the one, the person that
                    was chosen. I was the one born to
                    this family. I must keep my head up
                    high when it seems this war will
                    never end. I know, however, that it
                    will end. I don’t know how I don’t
                    know when, but what I do know is
                    that it will end when you are
                    ready. This building so many times
                    I stood right here this spot, and
                    gazed out into the city, to hear
                    the cries of the people below. Oh
                    God God these dark skies I’m sick
                    of them. I want to see the sun
                    again. I want to see more than the
                    sliver of light that you shine on
                    the church. Oh, that church that
                    changed my life. God why did you
                    put it on that hill? Did you have
                    people build it so that you didn’t
                    have to move the hill? Like the
                    Bible said that you can move
                    mountains. Why am I still doing
                    this? Why am I again alone I
                    thought you would never leave or
                    forsake me?

          Page 2 Page 2: 2975A.D. Alister flashes back to when he
          finds out about his parents and sisters death.

            Panel 1 Taking up the top 3rd of the page: You see a
            church on the front of it, it says “Harvest Church;”
            behind the church in the distance you see the church on
            the hill.

                              ALISTER
                    I remember how I spiraled out of
                    control at least my life did. Okay,
                    I did too. It was at the church my
                    family had gone to for years. I had
                    gone when I was young, but when I
                    became a teenager they let me
                    decide what I wanted to do. So I
                    stopped going.

            Panel 2 Taking up the middle of the page: Inside the
            church, people standing, some with their hands up in the
            air, as they are singing.

                              ALISTER
                    I thought it was strange to see
                    people raise their hands and jump
                    up and down praising a being that
                    one couldn’t see.

            Panel 3 Taking up the bottom 3rd of the page: Inside the
            church, people sitting as the preacher is standing at his
            pulpit preaching.

                              ALISTER
                    As I recall the last service, for
                    what I was told later. Was talking
                    about…

                              PASTOR
                    Today we are going to talk about
                    the love of God, and his
                    forgiveness.

          Page 3 Page 3: 2975A. D. Alister’s flash back of his parents
          and sisters death. Part 2.

            Panel 1 People are leaving the church but a few are still
            standing around talking. The pastor comes up to a couple
            and their daughter.

                              PASTOR
                    Where’s your son Alister.

                              MOTHER
                    He didn’t want to come; he says
                    there is no God.

                              PASTOR
                    Oh, he is in the stage of his life
                    like others have been. The stage
                    that things that we can’t see must
                    be none existent or not real.

            Panel 2 Taking most of the page the church explodes.

            Panel 3 Alister stands at the funeral, a tear rolling down
            his cheek.

                              ALISTER
                    I can still remember what I thought
                    at the funeral.

                              ALISTER
                         (thinking)
                    Mom gave me a choice to go with
                    them, but I didn’t. Because I
                    didn’t, I mean I don’t believe in
                    God. This would have never happened
                    if there was a God.

                              ALISTER (CON’T)
                    Oh my thoughts went crazy that day,
                    but that was the day my path would
                    split and I would go down the road
                    that had no path. I was making my
                    own way. Or this is what I thought.

          Page 4 Page 4

            Panel 1 Alister hears screams. Alister shakes his head as
            if he was trying to wake himself up from sleeping
            (dreaming).

                              ALISTER
                    What in the hell…

            Panel 2 He jumps on his hovercycle.

                              ALISTER
                    That was a tortuous scream.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: He goes down the road, Screams erupt
            again, he travels to where the screams have come from.

                              ALISTER
                    Who ever this person is they sound
                    like hell has come to take there
                    soul.

                              ALISTER (CON’T)
                    This of course is all to common
                    today, but there still was
                    something in the scream.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: He sees that there is a girl running as
            fast as she can.

            Panel 5 Panel 5: Behind her is a man chasing her. Alister
            with his spiritual sight can see that the man is possessed
            by a demon. (Need to somehow show that he is a man and
            that he has maybe a silhouette of a demon.

                              MAN
                    Come here limitless bitch.

                              WOMAN
                    Aaaaahh!!!

          Page 5 Page 5

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister up close.

                              ALISTER
                         (says to himself)
                    This is sure getting old. These
                    demons will never learn.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Alister drives ahead of the girl and man
            and stops his hovercycle in front of the girl.

                              ALISTER
                         (saying to himself)
                    I can’t let this girl be captured,
                    I just can’t.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: He grabs the girls arm and pulls the girl
            behind him.

                              ALISTER
                    Get behind me, now, I’ll protect
                    you.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister gets off his hovercycle.

            Panel 5 Panel 4: The man close up of the man who is
            chaising the girl.

                              MAN
                    Oh it’s you, the White Warrior,
                    haha the Holy Warrior.

            Panel 6 Panel 5: With a stern look on his face.

                              ALISTER
                    Yes it is I.

          Page 6 Page 6

            Panel 1 Panel 1: The man tears off his skin to reveal the
            big demon.

                              ALISTER
                         (to himself)
                    What in the world is this demon
                    doing.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: As his hand is on his sword.

                              ALISTER
                         (thinks to himself)
                    This is new.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Alister then takes his sword out of its
            sheath. A look at Alister pointing at the man while the
            girl is behind him.

                              ALISTER
                    You know I can destroy you with one
                    blow of my sword.

          Page 7 Page 7

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Close up of the demon.

                              DEMON
                    You think so eh.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Another view of Alister and the girl.

                              ALISTER
                    Yes. I know so I have the power of
                    Christ on my side.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Close up of the demon.

                              DEMON
                    I want to see you try, little man.
                    I think you’re weaker then you
                    know.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: He points to a building that has graffiti
            on it. (Somewhere write small but enough that you can
            still see it: CTFxC)

                              ALISTER
                    Go, inside that building. I’ll take
                    care of this demon swine.

          Page 8 Page 8

            Panel 1 SPLASH Page: Alister runs at the demon as the
            demon runs toward him. The demon throws a punch.

                              ALISTER
                    I will destroy you with the power
                    of the Lord.

                              DEMON
                    No.  You don’t have the power that
                    you think you do, you are weaker
                    than I.

          Page 9 Page 9

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister dodges, and slashes his sword at
            the demon.

                              ALISTER
                    With the Power of Christ I will
                    defeat you

            Panel 2 Panel 2: He then hits the demon but nothing
            happens.

                              ALISTER
                    What that should have destroyed
                    you.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: The demon says with a snarl. (Close up)

                              DEMON
                    I guess your faith has started to
                    dwindle and I am stronger then your
                    so called sword from God.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: The demon runs inside the building.
            Alister chases after the demon.

                              ALISTER
                         (Talking to himself)
                    What the hell is going on? Why is
                    this demon wining?

            Panel 5 Panel 5: Alister looks around the inside of the
            building, it looks familiar to him.

                              ALISTER
                    I know this building, it can’t be.

          Page 10 Page 10: Alister flashes back to when he owned the
          building and he met Satan’s Minions.

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister is on the second floor leaning
            against a lattice. There comes a voice behind him.

                              STEVE
                    Dude, what are you doing just
                    looking at everyone?

                              ALISTER:
                    Shut up Steve. I’m just making sure
                    everyone is having a good time.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Alister turns to face to Steve.

                              ALISTER
                    You know I strive to make my
                    patrons happy. So, Just let me be
                    Steve.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: He starts to walk toward a table that had
            two mugs of beer on it.

                              STEVE
                    Come, sit and drink your beer.

                              ALISTER
                    I’m coming you piece of….

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister now sitting at the table.

                              STEVE
                    Alister you kiss my ass.

                              ALISTER
                    Kiss your what Steve?

            Panel 5 Panel 5: Alister with his fist in front of Steve’s
            face.

                              ALISTER
                    Do you want to kiss this.

                              STEVE
                    Um. no.

          Page 11 Page 11

            Panel 1 Panel 1: With a frightened stare. Alister beer in
            hand.

                              STEVE
                    I’m fine.

                              ALISTER
                    That’s what I thought.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Outside of the building rain poured down,
            and in the shadows a group of people walk toward the door
            of the building.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: The door opens up. You see a group of
            people with guns.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister looks down from the balcony
            lattice to see why the music has stopped and people who
            were having a good time were silent.

          Page 12 Page 12

            Panel 1 Panel 1: One of the people in the group points
            there gun to the ceiling and fires.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: People look towards the group and the
            band that was playing and others start to run out the
            front and back doors.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Alister pulls his gun.

                              ALISTER
                    What the hell are you doing here.
                    What the fuck do you want.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: The group points there gun toward the
            people in the club.

                              LEADER
                    We are Satan’s Minions and we are
                    here to take over. But we don’t
                    want just this building we have
                    come to take over the city and make
                    it, SatansVille. Hahahaha.

          Page 13 Page 13

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister’s posse takes out there weapons
            and points them toward Satan’s Minions.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Alister close up.

                              ALISTER
                    Like hell, you’re taking over.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Gun fire erupts from both sides.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Blood is flying everywhere and people are
            going down.

          Page 14 Page 14

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Both sides are still shooting, and people
            are running.  We see more getting hit by bullets, blood
            splashing everywhere.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: You see Alister behind a table.

                              ALISTER
                    Shit, Shit, Shit. What’s going on?
                    What did I do to deserve this? Ugh,
                    what am I fucking supposed to do?
                    To bad there isn’t a God, he might
                    be able to save us, me.

          Page 15 Page 15

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister is shooting as he goes down the
            stairs.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Alister jumps behind the bar.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: As he hides behind the bar he now notices
            he is bleeding from his arm.

                              ALISTER
                    Damn it.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister peaks his head over the bar.

                              ALISTER
                         (To himself)
                    I need to get out of here.

            Panel 5 Panel 5: Alister jumps the bar and heads towards
            the back door.

                              ALISTER
                         (Thought)
                    Come on legs, move.

          Page 16 Page 16

            Panel 1 Panel 1: We see Alister just outside the door
            behind him. The rain still coming down lightning flashes.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Alister is running and being chased by
            some of Satan’s Minions. They are still shooting. Blam
            blam.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Alister is shot in the leg, blood goes
            everywhere.

                              ALISTER
                    Shit…my leg.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister starts to run up a hill. Bleeding
            abundantly from his arm and leg.

            Panel 5 Panel 5: He sees a rock.

                              ALISTER
                    I must make it behind.

          Page 17 Page 17

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister holding his arm is able to reach
            and get behind the rock.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: We see a close up of Alister’s arm bloody

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Lightning strikes close to Alister and
            the rock.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister rips his pants to check out his
            wound.

                              ALISTER
                    Shit, what the hell am I going to
                    do now?

            Panel 5 Panel 5: Alister now trying to tear his trench
            coat to cover his wounds.

          Page 18 Page 18

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Lightning striking even closer this time
            to Alister.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Some of Satan’s Minions that had chased
            Alister stop shooting.

                              MINION
                    That rock can’t protect you
                    forever. You’re bleeding bad,
                    you’ll want to get that looked at
                    before you lose to much blood and
                    die.

                              ALISTER
                    What the fuck do you want with me?
                    Why did you follow me?

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Close up of Alister. Finishing tieing his
            leg off. Arm is already tied off, both are tied with parts
            of his trench coat.

                              ALISTER
                    I’m not leaving this spot, so you
                    guys miles well sit.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Lightning strikes at the feet of Satan’s
            Minions.

                              MINION
                    Looks like your lucky day, or maybe
                    not. This lightning saved you from
                    us, but if you stay there who knows
                    if it will finally strike you. That
                    would help us.

          Page 19 Page 19

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Moments later lightning strikes the rock.

                              ALISTER
                    Shit that was to close.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Alister now looks over the left of the
            rock to see if those who had chased him that were part of
            Satan’s Minions had actually left.

                              ALISTER
                    Be gone, be gone, be gone.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Satan’s Minions no longer on the other
            side of the rock. Alister gets up.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister sees a dagger on the rock where
            the lightning struck.

                              ALISTER
                    Now what’s this? I didn’t see this
                    before. It would have been nice to
                    have this when I was trying to rip
                    at my trench coat.

            Panel 5 Panel 5: Close up of the dagger. (Need to talk
            about the design.)

          Page 20 Page 20

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister reaches for the dagger.

                              ALISTER
                    But what in the hell, how did this
                    get here in the first place?

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Alister picks up the dagger, looking at
            it intensely.

                              ALISTER
                    This looks expensive.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: As it lay in the palm of both hands
            warmth comes over him.

                              ALISTER
                    What’s going on?

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Blood stops dripping from his leg and
            arm.

                              ALISTER
                    The pain it, it’s gone.

            Panel 5 Panel 5: Alister places the dagger in his right
            hand, as he looks at his arm he sees nothing.

            Panel 6 Panel 6: Alister bends down, he looks at his leg,
            he sees nothing.

                              ALISTER
                    What happened to my wounds?

          Page 21 Page 21

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister looks at the dagger again.

                              ALISTER
                    What the Fu…

            Panel 2 Panel 2: Lightning strikes just right of Alister.

                              ALISTER
                    Holy shit that was so much closer.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Alister places the dagger back on the
            rock.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister starts to walk away when he is
            struck by lightning.

          Page 22 Page 22

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister wakes up in a white place, he
            can’t see anything but himself.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: His anger left him, he smiled ear to ear.

                              ALISTER
                    Why am I smiling? I just had been
                    shot and now there is nothing I can
                    see.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Alister walks and looks around.

                              GOD
                    Alister come fourth.

                              ALISTER
                    Come fourth, I can’t see anything.
                    How am I supposed to know where to
                    go?

                              GOD
                    You have been chosen.

                              ALISTER
                    Chosen for what?

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister sits down on the whiteness.

                              GOD
                    Your blood is what has chosen you;
                    you are a descendant of a man who
                    promised loyalty and obedience.

                              ALISTER
                    My blood, descendant, I don’t know
                    what you mean. Who the hell are
                    you?

                              GOD
                    I am the Lord thy God.

          Page 23 Page 23 Alister flashes back to the empty building.

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister attention was now looking at the
            balcony where he saw the demon with the girl over his
            shoulder.

                              ALISTER
                    That seemed so very long ago.

            Panel 2 Panel 2: We get a close up of the demons face,

                              DEMON
                    Come get me you little piece of
                    shit.

                              ALISTER
                    I am not a little piece of
                    anything.

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Alister runs toward the stairs.

            Panel 4 Panel 4: He reaches the second level and sees the
            demon head for the window.

                              ALISTER
                         (Yelling)
                    Where do you think you’re going
                    demon?

            Panel 5 Panel 5: The demon turns toward Alister, girl
            still over its shoulder.

                              DEMON
                    I’m taking this girl and I’m going
                    to sacrifice her and let my father
                    have her soul.

                              ALISTER
                    There is only one Father.

                              DEMON
                    Ha I’m not talking about him I’m
                    talking about my father Satan.

            Panel 6 Panel 6: The demon jumps out the window.

            Panel 7 Panel 7: Alister looks out the window and sees
            nothing.

                              ALISTER
                    I…I didn’t, I couldn’t save her.

          Page 24 Page 24

            Panel 1 Panel 1: Alister puts his sword back in his sheath
            and starts to walk down the stairs.

                              ALISTER
                    Why? Why?

            Panel 2 Panel 2: As Alister walks out of the building.

                              ALISTER
                    What is wrong with me? Why,
                    couldn’t I save that girl?”

            Panel 3 Panel 3: Alister arrives back at his hovercycle.

                              ALISTER
                    God what’s going on? I have never
                    not defeated a fow with this sword.
                    What in the world is going on?

            Panel 4 Panel 4: Alister flies off.

                              ALISTER
                    I never seen a demon rip off human
                    flesh like it was cloths. And then
                    I wasn’t able to save not only a
                    soul but the girl. The girl looked
                    so, I don’t know what’s wrong with
                    me. AAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!

            Panel 5 Panel 5: Alister sees the church on the hill the
            light that pireced through the darkness seemed to be
            getting smaller.

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Brad Thor Facebook Review and Other Information



When looking at Facebook and social media it makes one think of who, what, where and when. This you may ask yourself, WHAT?! Well let me explain with whom it can be who your audience is or who are you and what are you trying to get across to people (fans) that will keep them posted on what you’re doing and what you’re working on. It allows you to show where you’re going with an idea and where you have been physically if you post check ins. Then it comes to when, when will your work be complete? When will you be at this or that location?

When looking at Brad Thor’s Facebook page you see when he created it, 06/09/09. Now you may ask ha HE didn’t create it someone else did for him. Well looking at his about section you get a Welcome message this makes it sound like someone else created the page. Then you go down to Biography, and then you see “me” and “I” being used. Yes, someone else could be writing this information too and act like the main man himself, but I feel that it’s Brad himself. Then we get to some personal information. It describes his education where he worked and his other novels. Then you get to his personal interests where there are quotes that HE (or someone who thinks that HE/SHE is HE):
“If you can dream it, you can do it” – Goethe
“A wise and frugal government, which shall leave men free to regulate their own pursuits of industry and improvement, and shall not take from the mouth of labor and bread it has earned – this is the sum of good government.” – Thomas Jefferson
“Freedom is never more than one generation away from extinction. We didn’t pass it to our children in the bloodstream. It must be fought for, protected, and handed on for them to do the same, or one day we will spend our sunset years telling our children and our children’s children what it was once like in the United States where men were free.” – Ronald Reagan
All over the place, you see links to his website to get even further information about him. Brad posts political information that is close to one of his books, or he posts something that has to do with the military because well, his books all work around some sort of military operative or person. He reposts things that he has read or seen online. He has a wealth of information on his page, and if you follow him (LIKE) on Facebook then you get the most up to date information that he is reading, watching and well writing too. I have also seen him post comments to things that others have posted to his wall.
When it comes to Brad Thor’s Facebook page and others, I’ve seen they network with their fans, and some make sure to comment to them as well no matter how popular they are. Which I think is a great thing and something I look forward to doing.
Blah Blah Blah: Some other information about Facebook and how to keep your fans.
Well, you’re at the end of my blah blah blah. However, this was done as part of an assignment for a class that I’m taking at Southern New Hampshire Online. You may be wondering if there is more to this review, and I can say yes. I have researched the following about Facebook for writers, and I’m here to give you some of the main points and some of my thoughts.
It is a good practice to write in plain none complicated English. Don’t use big words that people have to go to a dictionary to find out about especially for those who are checking via their mobile phone. They don’t have the time or space to look things up.
Write compelling but clear headlines, don’t get cute. Headlines are the first thing that people see, and if it’s not clear nor short then you have a problem.
Write in the active voice, get to the point.
Online writing is visual, long, dense paragraphs turn off online readers. Create white space in your copy by keeping paragraphs short and using bulleted lists when appropriate. Use bold text to accent key information and use block or pull quotes to draw readers into the copy.
One main idea per sentence, keep sentences on point.
No sentence without a fact: Every line you write needs to move the story forward. If a sentence doesn’t have a fact, cut it.
For every 1,000 or so words that you write in an online article or blog post, be sure to include:
  •       Three subheads: Subheads are bold, one-line headlines that break up long chunks of text and organize information. Keep the same headline-writing rules in mind when you write subheads.
  •       Two links: Links offer additional information for readers who want to go deeper, and they also give your post authenticity and transparency about where you information came from without getting into long, narrative attributions.
  •       One graphical element: A photo, a chart or anything else visual helps readers. Whatever you use, make sure it advances the story: don’t just put a photo in the post for the sake of posting a photo.
Strategies for Effective Facebook Wall Posts
  •        Posts made between 8 PM and 7 AM receive 20% more user engagement.
  •        On Wednesdays, fan engagement is 8% above average.
  •        Posting one to two times per day produces 40% higher user engagement.
  •        Posting one to four times per week produces 71% higher user engagement.
  •        Posts with 80 characters or less receive 66% higher engagement. Very concise posts – those between one and 40 characters – generate highest engagement. Only 5% of all retail brand Wall Posts are less than 40 characters in length, even though these receive 86% higher fan engagement.
  •       Ask questions to spark dialogue – “question” Posts generate Comment rates double that of “non-question” Posts.
  •       Fill in the blank Posts receive 9 times more Comments than other Posts.
  •       Offer fans “$ off” and coupons. Posts containing these offer-related keywords receive the highest engagement.
  •        “$ OFF” offers receive twice the engagement of “% OFF” offers.
  •       Avoid complicated Wall Posts. Status-only Posts receive 94% higher than average engagement
 References
Brad Thor’s Facebook Page
Best Practices For Writing For Online Readers. (n.d.). ReadWriteWeb – Web Apps, Web Technology Trends, Social Networking and Social Media. Retrieved October 13, 2012, from http://www.readwriteweb.com/archives/best_practices_for_writing_for_online_readers.php
 Tracker., E. (n.d.). Writing Effective Facebook Posts | Social Media Today. Social media news, strategy, tools, and techniques | Social Media Today. Retrieved October 13, 2012, from http://socialmediatoday.com/bigsea/370308/writing-effective-facebook-posts

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